Yes, it’s another Sunday, time for another snippet. I think everyone who reads this will know the score – just click on the pic to get to the list.
I’m hoping to do a bit better this week for getting round the group. Sorry if I didn’t get to you last week.
Picking up again from last week where the argument between Kit and Wigram was broken up by O’Neill, who outranks them both.
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O’Neill looked them over with a knowing eye and jerked his thumb towards the quarterdeck. “You don’t need to convince me. He‘s awake and wants to know what’s going on,” he said. “So—Wigram, Penrose, and you, too, Denny, come with me and the rest of you shut up and go back to sleep unless you want to changes watches now? Penrose, leave the shirt – a little night air won’t hurt you. ”
Kit was half way along the deck before he realised both Wigram and Denny were dragging their heels.
O’Neill glanced at him and shook his head. “You did it right and proper.”
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Uh oh, they’re in trouble.
I just remembered, I was going to buy On a Lee Shore as a treat for myself when I finally published my new book, and I did that today! Squee!
*wibbles* fingers crossed you enjoy it. It’s much more like Indiana Jones than Casanova 🙂
I love Indiana Jones!
Nice snippet. Tension!! Look forward to the scene.
Oh dear. I see trouble ahead. Nice bit of tension there. 😳
Suspenseful snippet. I could almost smell the sea.
Great snippet, I wonder what they did to get them in trouble.
Uh-oh is right. Sounds like somebody’s in trouble. 😉 Nice snippet!
I feel something coming. The scene was so vivid and loved the building up here. Great job. 🙂
Nice detail and use of dialogue to up the tension — well done!
I always like the crispness of dialogue. This is a very enjoyable snippet.
Uh-oh, there’s a storm brewing!
that scene just flowed!
As is typically the case with your snippets, great pace and use of dialogue to ramp up tension.
Something’s coming! Nice details and I agree with the others that it flowed smoothly.
Boys will be boys until they’re sent to the principal’s office. ;P
(I like O’Neill, he seems like a fair sort of fellow.)
Tense, really ratcheting up the tension to whatever is coming next. Terrific snippet!
Good snippet. Elin. Lots of details, crisp dialogue, good tension. And punishment to come. 🙂
Nice dialogue. Lots of buildup. Leaves me wondering what’s coming next.
Great dialogue. I can see the whole thing as if I’d watched it on TV.
Oh good, Kit has an ally. Great snippet, Elin. 🙂
I’m not sure anyone as an ally.
sheesh, they must be in for it! I like how this excerpt gives us a short break before more trouble erupts. Like your word choices here too 😀