Weekend Writing Warriors #6

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Weekend Writing Warriors #6

March 10, 2013 by Elin Gregory

Yes, it’s another Sunday, time for another snippet. I think everyone who reads this will know the score – just click on the pic to get to the list.

I’m hoping to do a bit better this week for getting round the group. Sorry if I didn’t get to you last week.

Picking up again from last week where the argument between Kit and Wigram was broken up by O’Neill, who outranks them both.

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O’Neill looked them over with a knowing eye and jerked his thumb towards the quarterdeck. “You don’t need to convince me. He‘s awake and wants to know what’s going on,” he said. “So—Wigram, Penrose, and you, too, Denny, come with me and the rest of you shut up and go back to sleep unless you want to changes watches now? Penrose, leave the shirt – a little night air won’t hurt you. ”

Kit was half way along the deck before he realised both Wigram and Denny were dragging their heels.

O’Neill glanced at him and shook his head. “You did it right and proper.”

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Uh oh, they’re in trouble.

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23 Responses

on March 10, 2013 at 2:49 am | Reply antoinettemsmut

I just remembered, I was going to buy On a Lee Shore as a treat for myself when I finally published my new book, and I did that today! Squee!
- on March 11, 2013 at 8:26 pm | Reply Elin Gregory
  
  *wibbles* fingers crossed you enjoy it. It’s much more like Indiana Jones than Casanova 🙂
  - on March 14, 2013 at 1:50 am antoinettemsmut
    
    I love Indiana Jones!
on March 10, 2013 at 7:12 am | Reply Karen Michelle Nutt

Nice snippet. Tension!! Look forward to the scene.
on March 10, 2013 at 11:18 am | Reply jessielansdel

Oh dear. I see trouble ahead. Nice bit of tension there. 😳
on March 10, 2013 at 2:54 pm | Reply Sherry Gloag

Suspenseful snippet. I could almost smell the sea.
on March 10, 2013 at 3:08 pm | Reply Megan Grooms, Author

Great snippet, I wonder what they did to get them in trouble.
on March 10, 2013 at 3:10 pm | Reply Joanne Stewart

Uh-oh is right. Sounds like somebody’s in trouble. 😉 Nice snippet!
on March 10, 2013 at 3:13 pm | Reply brendaashworthbarry

I feel something coming. The scene was so vivid and loved the building up here. Great job. 🙂
on March 10, 2013 at 4:42 pm | Reply daezarkian

Nice detail and use of dialogue to up the tension — well done!
on March 10, 2013 at 4:46 pm | Reply jessschira

I always like the crispness of dialogue. This is a very enjoyable snippet.
on March 10, 2013 at 4:48 pm | Reply Botanist

Uh-oh, there’s a storm brewing!
on March 10, 2013 at 4:57 pm | Reply Sue

that scene just flowed!
on March 10, 2013 at 6:32 pm | Reply J.M. Blackman

As is typically the case with your snippets, great pace and use of dialogue to ramp up tension.
on March 10, 2013 at 7:21 pm | Reply Frank Fisher

Something’s coming! Nice details and I agree with the others that it flowed smoothly.
on March 10, 2013 at 7:44 pm | Reply Monica Enderle Pierce

Boys will be boys until they’re sent to the principal’s office. ;P
(I like O’Neill, he seems like a fair sort of fellow.)
on March 10, 2013 at 8:08 pm | Reply veronicascott

Tense, really ratcheting up the tension to whatever is coming next. Terrific snippet!
on March 10, 2013 at 9:43 pm | Reply Teresa Cypher

Good snippet. Elin. Lots of details, crisp dialogue, good tension. And punishment to come. 🙂
on March 10, 2013 at 11:21 pm | Reply Mandy Earles (@meryvamp)

Nice dialogue. Lots of buildup. Leaves me wondering what’s coming next.
on March 10, 2013 at 11:59 pm | Reply ellaquinnauthor

Great dialogue. I can see the whole thing as if I’d watched it on TV.
on March 11, 2013 at 1:39 am | Reply siobhanmuir

Oh good, Kit has an ally. Great snippet, Elin. 🙂
on March 11, 2013 at 3:51 am | Reply sueannbowlingauthor

I’m not sure anyone as an ally.
on March 12, 2013 at 3:21 am | Reply Marcia

sheesh, they must be in for it! I like how this excerpt gives us a short break before more trouble erupts. Like your word choices here too 😀