Weekend Writing Warriors #5

March 2, 2013 by Elin Gregory

Here we go again, folks, with another bunch of sentences taken from a variety of authors, genres and works. Just click on the picture to get to the list of links.

My excerpt is from On A Lee Shore, again, and picks up directly from last week’s.

Denny, one of nature’s innocents, has been cozened by Bosun Wigram into giving Kit a bit of a surprise. Kit, woken from sleep, thumped Denny, realised what had happened and thumped Wigram, waking the entire watch in the process. It’s a short fight, Kit is hauled off Wigram by Lewis and Protheroe, who seems inclined to flirt.

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Some laughed at that, but others shouted angrily. One man claimed he’d seen this and another that and people who couldn’t have possibly seen anything expressed an opinion.
“Stow it!” O’Neill was there, lantern in hand and glaring angrily around. “What are you at? Jesus, Mary and Joseph, this is a fo’csle not a bear pit.”
“Penrose attacked Denny and hit me when I intervened,” Wigram snapped. “I knew it was a mistake to bring him aboard.”

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More next week.

Posted in Uncategorized | 19 Comments

19 Responses

on March 3, 2013 at 2:53 am | Reply Sue

Yep people will have an opinion even if not present. Actually you gave a lot of info here
on March 3, 2013 at 12:11 pm | Reply Jess Schira

Sue’s right. A great deal is revealed about the general atmosphere/environment in this snippet.
on March 3, 2013 at 1:56 pm | Reply Teresa Cypher

Elin, you establish such great atmosphere in a short snippet. Well done! 🙂
on March 3, 2013 at 2:03 pm | Reply Sarah W

Man . . . Please tell me Wigram doesn’t get away with this (even if he manages it for the moment). I want him keelhauled for doing that to Danny and Kit.
on March 3, 2013 at 2:21 pm | Reply Sherry Gloag

Love all the emotion and angst going on in this snippet.
on March 3, 2013 at 2:58 pm | Reply jessielansdel

Wigram should walk the plank. Great snippet as usual, Elin. 😀
on March 3, 2013 at 5:05 pm | Reply Gemma Parkes

Great snippet, fun and well expressed!
on March 3, 2013 at 5:30 pm | Reply siobhanmuir

Sounds like Wigram has some ulterior beef with Kit to get him in this much trouble. Good tension, Elin. 🙂
on March 3, 2013 at 6:44 pm | Reply Threads of Life

“people who couldn’t have possibly seen anything expressed an opinion. Typical. Is there not anyone really on Kit’s side in this situation?
on March 3, 2013 at 7:08 pm | Reply veronicascott

I’m sure there will be a lot of fallout from this little episode, intriguing. Terrific snippet!
on March 3, 2013 at 8:35 pm | Reply sueannbowlingauthor

I hope Kit gets a chance to tell his side of the story.
on March 3, 2013 at 9:25 pm | Reply Cindy Amrhein ( @historysleuth1 )

Very realistic. People who aren’t there always seem to have the most to say!
on March 3, 2013 at 10:32 pm | Reply Marcia

Ha! That comment of Wigram’s fits his personality type perfectly! Never at fault, always either a victim or an innocent bystander. Great excerpt.
on March 4, 2013 at 12:42 am | Reply Anne Lange

I love the dialogue. Great piece.
on March 4, 2013 at 2:54 am | Reply Frank Fisher

Great dialogue and nicely detailed scene. Love the new banner, btw.
on March 4, 2013 at 2:55 am | Reply FCEtier

Nice 8!
on March 4, 2013 at 4:16 pm | Reply Joyce Scarbrough

Great choice for your snippet. Like others said, there’s a lot revealed in these few sentences. I’m really enjoying this!
on March 5, 2013 at 4:32 pm | Reply hilarymb

Hi Elin .. welcome to the A-Z Challenge .. I’m one of Tina’s minions (she’s one of the co-hosts) saying ‘hi’ and checking out you’re all set – looks like it – with your badge up (I have to sort mine out still) … Enjoy April .. cheers Hilary
on March 10, 2013 at 1:30 am | Reply Weekend Writing Warriors #6 | Elin Gregory

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