Weekend Writing Warriors #2

February 10, 2013 by Elin Gregory

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Time for another eight sentences from On A Lee Shore. If you recall Kit had a painful awakening when someone grabbed his family jewels.

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Denny sat on the floor, holding his nose and sobbing. “You di’n oughter dun that,” he wept. “That HURT!” He waved a hand at Wigram who was a few paces away, holding his sides. “He said you was a maid. He said you wouldn’t mind.” Denny seemed more heartbroken at the betrayal than from the pain of his nose and Kit was overcome with pity, and with rage at how both he and poor Denny had been made to look ridiculous.

“Wigram,” Kit snarled and flung himself at the bo’sun’s throat.

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So – what’s the pirate punishment for striking an officer? Find out – um – in a few weeks. Eight sentences at a time doesn’t exactly speed the story along.

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32 Responses

on February 10, 2013 at 10:37 am | Reply Heather Boyd

Cannot wait for next week. Very funny so far. 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 11:59 am | Reply Gem Sivad

Denny is so well drawn I can picture him. Fantastic scene.
on February 10, 2013 at 12:10 pm | Reply Jess Schira

I agree with Gem. Nicely done!
on February 10, 2013 at 12:59 pm | Reply jessielansdel

Oh dear. I think Wigram is about to receive a bloody nose. 😳 Very nice scene. And very amusing. 😄
on February 10, 2013 at 1:59 pm | Reply Theo Fenraven

I love the dialog. 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 2:07 pm | Reply Chip Etier

Nice 8.
Wasn’t homosexuality rampant among pirates?
on February 10, 2013 at 2:11 pm | Reply Sherry Gloag

A great scene.
on February 10, 2013 at 3:25 pm | Reply Paula Martin

Great scene!
on February 10, 2013 at 3:34 pm | Reply Joyce Scarbrough

Too fun! Looking forward to more.
on February 10, 2013 at 4:02 pm | Reply Zee Monodee

Too funny! well done! 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 4:17 pm | Reply Marcia

Fabulous excerpt, Elin! Your characters’ personalities always come across so clearly, I love that about your writing 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 5:38 pm | Reply Siobhan Muir

I’d be rolling between pity for Denny and fury at Wigram too. Good snippet, Elin. 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 5:39 pm | Reply Clare Davidson

Poor Denny! I loved his dialect. It looks like Kit is about to do something rash–deserved, but rash.
on February 10, 2013 at 5:39 pm | Reply Sue

fun stuff – but wasn’t it the officer who set them up?
on February 10, 2013 at 5:39 pm | Reply Karen Michelle Nutt

Interesting. I would like to find out how this scene plays out. 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 5:51 pm | Reply Frank Fisher

Love the dialogue and dialect, very realistic and it stands out.
on February 10, 2013 at 6:11 pm | Reply Joanne Stewart

I agree–terrific scene!
on February 10, 2013 at 6:25 pm | Reply Amy Durham

Love the humor here!
on February 10, 2013 at 6:42 pm | Reply Virginia Kelly

Fantastically well-written, great way to let us know what’s happening in a few sentences.
on February 10, 2013 at 8:15 pm | Reply AJ Bradley

LOTS of fun, looking forward to more!
on February 10, 2013 at 8:20 pm | Reply Karysa Faire

LOL. Great scene!
on February 10, 2013 at 8:30 pm | Reply Jane Wakely

Awww…poor Denny! His pain really comes through in this sample! 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 8:36 pm | Reply Debbie

Nothing like a good pirate story with humour! 🙂 Nice to meet you, Elin.
on February 10, 2013 at 8:37 pm | Reply Stevie Carroll

Looking forward to finding out what will happen to him now. Excellent excerpt again.
on February 10, 2013 at 9:05 pm | Reply Botanist

Well, pirates being pirates, I guess if you strike hard enough the punishment could be a swift promotion? Somehow I don’t see that happening, though. Intriguing snippet 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 9:29 pm | Reply Anne Lange

Great piece. Great dialogue!! Poor nose.
on February 10, 2013 at 10:59 pm | Reply Evelyn Jules

I love your dialogue. Very enjoyable eight, Elin! Always look forward to more from you! 🙂
on February 10, 2013 at 11:52 pm | Reply DasNuk

Very nice dialogue! 🙂
on February 11, 2013 at 12:44 am | Reply sarahballance

Is it okay I laughed at this? Because I totally laughed at this. Sooo well written and FUNNY!
on February 11, 2013 at 12:45 am | Reply Lila Shaw

Love the line that he sounded more hurt over his betrayal than his physical ailment. LOL
on February 11, 2013 at 1:54 am | Reply Marie

Good job!
on February 11, 2013 at 10:31 pm | Reply Ryan Derham

Funny scene. His unexpected reaction was priceless. 🙂