I remembered to sign up this week! And since Nanowrimo probably isn’t going to happen Chez Elin, due to all kinds of annoying outside influences, I hope to be a bit better at commenting to other folks posts than I was last week. I read quite a lot but – well, silent appreciation isn’t nearly as good as a “hi well done” under the post, is it.
Anyhow, Six Sentence Sunday! The usual drill. Sex sentences taken from a WIP. Click this link to see masses of others, usually close to 200, in genres varying from gritty dystopian si-fi to YA inspirational and back via masses and masses of het erotica.
Since I am still editing On A Lee Shore [I’ve spent the last 4 days trying, and failing, to write a sex scene *facepalm*] you’re getting a random bit from that.
The pirate sloop Africa is under fire from a naval vessel.
“Bracketed, par Dieu,” Valliere whispered and he and Kit ducked down behind the transom as another gun spoke. Africa lurched, her boom swinging. There were screams. Kit looked up as Valliere leaped to his feet and ran forward. MacGregor, the big Scot, flopped like a fish, hands holding a bloody mess where his guts had been, until blood burst from his mouth and he fell back and stilled. A section of rigging where he had been standing hung in a hopeless tangle.
Elin Gregory 
Very graphic, gory and exciting 😖 I like it.
Was that slip above intentional or Freudian. You say “Sex sentences taken from WIP” I WAS hoping………lol. 😆
Nicely done.
Wow, those are very gruesome details. Nicely done! 🙂
Oh, excellent description, Elin. You turned my stomach. lol I feel your pain on trying and failing to write a sex scene. I’ve been doing the same this week! Good luck with yours!
Another wonderful 6, Elin! I was right there with them!
Graphic and gripping. Excellent job!
Yep disgusting – as it was supposed to be – you’re so good wth those little details. I took a class on sex scene writing. It’s one of the toughest things a writer can do – in my opiniion anyway
You made that sex/six “slip” on purpose! 🙂 Great scene here, hope we get to see Kit’s reaction to real-life battle. Could I make a small suggestion? “There were screams” comes across as kind of flat to me and I have absolute faith that you can tweak it into something much better, since you’re good at details !
Great six, tense and descriptive, and I love Age of Sail stories.
OMG Elin, I feel as if I am there watching his guts spilling. Gosh you really do have a way with words, carrying your reader right there into the fray with you!
Ah, yes, those tricky sex scenes. That said, give me “blood and guts” any time! Writing an action scene that “feels” real is much harder and you do it so dang well!
Love the gruesome details, this is great story line. Don’t worry too much about Nanowrimo, I wanted to do it too, but like you too many outside distractions.
Kick ass action scene, gory and suspenseful. Great Six.
Incredibly vivd.
Frighteningly real.
Guts spilling, pirates… my kind of spine-chilling romance. 😉 Goodness gracious this is seriously a gross scene. LOL
Great six. I’m feeling a little woozy, so you’ve done the details right! LOL
You write great battle scenes.
This ROCKS! And I’m glad I’m not the only one who writes “sex” instead of “six” LOL!