Here we go again with another short and frustrating snippet for Six Sentence Sunday.
Six Sunday is a weekly blog hop where close to 200 authors post bits of published stories or WIPs as tasters. A few brave souls are even writing stories six sentences at a time! Go here for the linky list. It’s really good fun to see all the different styles and genres and awesome to contemplate the sheer amount of effort and talent boiling away there providing new works for the reading public.
Anyhow, if you’re here you aren’t here to hear me blether.
Last Six Sunday, or near equivalent, I asked whether I should post banter, battle, or UST this week, and had a resounding vote of one for UST! If you’re not sure what UST is, it stands for Unresolved Sexual Tension – those moments when both parties are beginning to know what they want but for some perfectly valid reason are unable to commit to doing anything about it.
To get to the UST I’ve had to miss out a heck of a lot of banter and a battle. Moried challenges Gwion and they fight. Cyfal is asked to see Gwion safely home, where he offers to see if his ribs are broken.
He pressed the bruised ribs firmly with the ball of his thumb, listening for the tell tale grate of breakage, but all he heard was a soft indrawn breath from Gwion that didn’t, quite, sound like a gasp of pain. Cynfal leaned a little closer until his breath warmed the cold flesh, and stroked with his thumb again. Gwion stood still but Cynfal felt the quiver that ran through him.
He had one brief glimpse of the swell at the front of Gwion’s breeks before he flinched away, dropping the shirt’s hem back to mid thigh, and reached for his belt.
Cynfal got up and kept his voice light as he said, “Not much harm done, I don’t think.”
Gwion didn’t answer — he was fastening his belt with sharp angry gestures — so Cynfal went to the door to wait for the rest of his bothy to arrive.
Elin Gregory 
Nice slow development of their show of longing, Elin. 🙂 Still holding great tension. Well done.
Thanks, Teresa. I think I need to post some ‘for info’ bits to make it clear that there’s more going on than Cynfal having an itch he want scratching. Thanks for commenting.
Another great six, Elin. Thank you. 😉
Thanks, sweetie.
😀 ten days! or thereabouts.
Nice development in the story. Great six. I’m intrigued
Thanks Heather. Intrigued is good 🙂
I’ve done this maybe twice, posted six sentences, and it’s HARD. Your choice was very good. Well done. 🙂
Thanks, Fen. I’m very aware that I’m only showing glimpses. Six sentences can’t be entertaining and still show all the nuts and bolts of a story. I’m missing out all the politics, backstories, personalities, that Cynfal isn’t just scratching an itch. But it’s still a useful exercise and it’s great to get a bit of feedback. Thanks for commenting.
Wow — very nice! I’m as frustrated as they are now. LOL And I loved your description of UST. 🙂
UST is my favourite thing to write. 🙂 Well, maybe 2nd favourite after a good solid action scene. Thanks for commenting.
Nicely sensuous scene 🙂
Thanks Sandra 🙂
Great excerpt, Elin. I definitely get a sense that both of them are feeling the attraction. I’m betting neither of them is going to forget these couple of minutes!
🙂 Cynfal won’t. He’s been planning for it. Gwion, because he is contrary, will try to pretend nothing happened. Mind you, this is the first draft, so who knows what will happen by the time it’s ready to submit. 🙂 Thanks for commenting.
Excellent sexual tension. Love the conflict.
Thanks Joanne. UST makes the world go round – or at least makes their heads spin a bit. 🙂
Oh, that was very nicely done.
Ooh, we can definitely feel the attraction there. Very nice.
Yes, the sexual tension is very strong there. 🙂
Score one for sexual tension! Yep, I could sense it immediately.
Fab as always, Elin!
Gwion’s surely not the only one to have swelling in his breeks … 😉
Love UST but I’m all for banter and battles, too. Just sayin’. 😉 Terrific six this week, Elin. You did make me smile with Cynfal’s comment of “not much harm done.” 😉
And what an UST it is. You’re killing me, Elin. Really. The most delicious tension ever. You’ve got a way of drawing it out the tension with specific details that makes the scene very crisp. In entirety, I bet it’s…well, facemelting.
Sensuous display and the tension just adds to the six!
Now that’s some great UST! Very sensuous six.
I’m finally home and missed my six friends greatly. Great scene, all that belt snapping lol
Yep, you nailed the UST. Great tension, great body language, great work!
Oh, boys!
Great scene overall. I do like these characters and I guess Gwion agrees that there isn’t much damage to his ribs, unless he’s hiding something from Cynfal?
Nice buildup of frustration.
Cynfal! You missed your opportunity, man. This is going to be one long exciting frustrating story, Elin!
You certainly seem to have nailed the sexual tension between these two. I’m very impressed.
Every week I’m amazed by how much editing I need to do just so I have six interesting sentences. You always choose well.
Terrific details here, and a nice pacing to create just the right level of tension between them. Terrific stuff! =D
Great six, Erin. The pace and frustration are evident through the words.
Very, very, nice. Love your writing style.
I love this!