Once again it’s time to click our way around the world with Six Sentence Sunday reading excerpts from authors published, unpublished, self published and writing for the hell of it.
I’m definitely one of the latter. Writing for the fun of it is the name of the game. If anything sensible happens to the story afterwards that’s just the icing on the cake.
Anyhow, to extend the metaphor waaaay beyond the point where I should have given it up as a bad job, here is another bite from one of my unbaked scones. I’m wondering whether I should add a dash of drama currants, grate in some sexy lemon zest, apply a cherry for the big red nose of humour or sprinkle in the roughly chopped nuts of violence.
Actually that last one was rather disturbing. So on with the excerpt.
Back to Cynfal and his mates from A Fierce Reaping. Cynfal and Aeddan have had a minor falling out and are mending fences by trying to maim each other.
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“Give up before you hurt yourself” Cynfal snarled, “I knew that trick when you were still sucking on your mother’s teat.”
Aeddan strained back, his breath harsh now. “Better teat than cock – once you’re on your knees I’ll give you a taste of my hero’s portion.”
“I’d sooner lick out a midden.”
“I thought as much from your breath.”
They grinned at each other, breathless but having fun.
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Niiiiiice! ‘Sexy lemon zest’ Well, lemon and grater at the ready me thinks. I love this kind of banter. ‘Hero’s portion’ That’s a new one. Love it. 😉
Naaah, Cynfal tops and Aeddan likes girls if he can get them. But they do enjoy thumping each other. 🙂 thanks for commenting.
What fun indeed.
Great six.
Thanks Stevie. I have such fun with these lads. Pity I’m going to kill most of them.
Very fun six. Lovely camaraderie between them.
Thanks Joanne. And thanks for commenting.:)
Fun six! In this kind of scene, I always like to see the humor and competitiveness of friends come out. I get the impression from these guys that even though they’re friends, they’ll still try to one-up each other. 🙂
Oh of course. Just like today only now we often do it with ‘who owns the best Apple products’. 🙂
Great dialogue, Elin! Love the banter!
thanks CC 🙂
Brilliant! What absolute fun. Great six.
Thanks for commenting Karen. glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
They sound like two competitive chums from a fraternity. Enjoyable read as always!
I suppose they are in a way – maybe the Omicron Mu Gamma fraternity with the initiation ceremony that involves eating a raw haggis? 🙂 Glad ypu enjoyed it.
Ha!!
I love you. Just FYI.
awww *blushes*
😀
Hero’s portion? Love that! This is going to be a great book. 🙂
Oh I hope so. It’s going to be terribly grim later but I have my fingers crossed that it’ll still be a good read. Thanks for your encouragement.
Heee – great bit of verbal sparring.
Thankee kindly S’oooh
Great dialogue, Elin. I LOVE these guys.
A little crit that I hope you won’t mind. I don’t think you need “but having fun” since you so clearly convey their pleasure with their banter. 🙂
Also, I was wondering if you could post a guide to pronouncing their names next Sunday. I’m convinced I’m mutilating them every week. Thx!
Always pleased to get concrit 🙂 yes, that bit about fun is a bit de trop. Many thanks.
I’ll make a bit of a list of names and link to it in next weeks post. To be honest there are names in the original poem that I can’t pronounce so no wonder other folks are having problems.
LOL! Glad I’m not alone. 🙂
Yes, great fun – loved the teat line, well all of them. I write for the hell of it too and yes add some currents to that half baked scone –love the imagery
😀 thanks sue and thanks for commenting.
This was equal parts fun and sexy. Their banter is fantastic. Great six.
Thanks JM. I enjoyed writing that section and I always think that shows. thanks for commenting
I was cackling through this whole thing. Great six. 🙂
That’s made me very happy. Humour is such a personal thing and I’m never sure whether mine translates well for other people. thanks for commenting
Wonderful dialogue–banter brought to life for the reader! 🙂
Thanks Teresa 😀
Fun six! Very nice job!
Thanks Jess and thanks for commenting.
If they’re friends I’d hate to hear what they’d say to enemies!
Ah enemies – no talking, just reach for a knife. 🙂 thanks for commenting.
Love the banter. Seriously, just love it. Perfect voice!