It’s Six Sentence Sunday time!
Go to the website here and there are links to click that will whizz you all around the world to read bits of stories from gritty sci fi, dystopian future, spine chilling horror and lots of heterotica! Something to suit every taste.
My six this week are taken from my WIP A Fierce Reaping – a story about a Romano-celtic warband preparing to ride south to tackle Aelthelfrith, a Saxon warleader who is pushing the boundaries north to threaten the lands of the Gododdin. War and mayhem is good fun to write but I think it’s more fun to read when a threat to loving relationships up the stakes.
Following on from last week’s six, Cynfal is walking some horses back to the picket lines and meets Gwion, the harper, whom he rather fancies. He suspects the feeling could be mutual so speaks to him and asks where he is going. Gwion is going Cynfal’s way but seems uncertain of his welcome:
Gwion shrugged and patted the bay again. “I could help?”
Even croaked the suggestion was tentative, as though too many offers of help, pleas for companionship, had been rejected.
Cynfal nodded. “I’ve been told to walk the horses so it’ll take longer but I’d be glad of some company.”
Gwion’s smile was dazzling as he took the reins of the bay and came to walk at Cynfal’s shoulder.
This looks really weird when taken out of context.
Elin Gregory 
I think your intro fixed any weirdness. Nice Six
Thanks Heather and thanks for commenting. 🙂
A great six – not weird at all.
Thanks Lisa. It’s a long time ’til love’s young dream but they’ll probably get there. 🙂
It’s not weird at all, I agree. You gave a good set-up, so I just enjoyed the snippet. 🙂 I always like hearing about what’s going on with Cynfal. I hope Gwion gets some confidence.
Thank you 🙂 I’m looking forward to finishing their story.
Not wierd at all, I must start doing it more regularly. I didn’t realise there was a time limit, so I missed going on the list.
I love the fact he “rather fancies a harper” 😀
Wednesday is the best day to go on the list. I’ll try to remember to remind you 🙂
There’s more to Cynfal than meets the eye, much more than has shown up in the Sunday Sixes. He has ‘plans’ *nods*.
It’s not weird – it can be hard to fit a scene into six sentences. You explained the setup well so the reader isn’t confused. Hope to see a follow-up from this. Good six!
Thanks Frank and thanks for taking the time to comment.
I think Gwion should be cautious and not “immediately” fall victim to Cynfal’s charm! If he weren’t cautious, I’d be suspicious. Not weird. I got a nice sense of the scene with these 6!!
Well guessed. Cynfal isn’t actually the cuddly bunny he appears to be and definitely has an agenda. 🙂 thanks for commenting
Love Gwion’s hesitancy. But, is it genuine?
Poor Gwion. Yes – with good reason. I’m wondering how to precis his back story into 6 sentences. 🙂
Hmm… now who else is he going to piss off by getting Gwion to help him?
Cynfal has his eye on the prize – not Gwion, incidentally – so is prepared to take the risk.
thanks for commenting 🙂
A good set up always makes the difference and putting a scene into six sentences helps me anyway, to see what’s really going on. Nice snippet
Thanks Sue.
Oh, I didn’t find it weird at all; I thought it was good, displayed that uncertainty that we’ve all felt–especially after experiencing rejection. Great six 🙂 !
Thanks Teresa. I think we’ve all been there, haven’t we?
Aw, Gwion’s doubt is adorable, and his smile is even better. I wonder what these two will talk about now.
Gwion’s a handsome lad, sure enough. You can bet they won’t talk about what Cynfal is thinking about 🙂 Thanks for commenting
not weird at all, great set up!
Thanks Maryellen and thanks for commenting
As has already been said, your intro provided the context. You conveyed the sense of companionship nicely, plus Gwion’s tentativeness was a nice touch.
Companionship is so important, especially in a society where well being depends completely on being ‘one of the crowd’. Thanks and thanks for commenting
I failed to sign up this week.Shall try harder next week.
Have you signed up yet? http://sixsunday.com 😀
I agree, your intro made it picture perfect. I could visualise the scene very clearly.
Thanks for commenting, Sherry.
Oh, nicely done! Gwion’s hesitancy was sweet, and it gave some insight into his personality and past. Great six!
Thanks K E and thanks for commenting.
What a great six, I really like these characters! Not weird at all!
🙂 I’m glad you like them. I’m looking forward to finishing their story. thanks for commenting
I remembered to sign up for this week!